Wednesday, October 19, 2005

scenes

Wow. I just finished rewriting forty pages that have been driving me crazy for days. I could not get this scene right, no matter what. I finally figures out two things--

1. It was in the wrong POV. I should have used the heroine's POV, not the hero's. My husband, the non-writer, knew that, and I was too dense to see it. That's why I make him read my stuff--he has a good objective, reader's perspective.

2. I was trying to force a love scene where one didn't need to be. I've always said that eroticism does not equal sex, and there I was, trying to use sex to make the scene sexy. Guess what, it didnt' work!

Once I figured out it could still be very erotic without consumation (the heroine and hero are discovering each other for the first time), then it just flowed. Also, the hero is the most unusual and interesting person in the scene, so I need to show him, not tell what he's feeling. (Showing not telling, the most basic rule in fiction writing, duh).

But, whew, I have the scene done, so I can move on. I know I'll have to go back and polish it, but that's fine. The nuts and bolts are there. Finally!!!

Writers, you ever have scenes that just won't work? Do you scrap them or work until you get it right?

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3 Comments:

At 7:21 PM , Blogger Cheyenne McCray said...

You know, it's funny, but I don't trash a scene unless my editor wants something rewritten, which happened in Forbidden Magic. (where I learned the difference between a REVISION and a REWRITE.) I just write a scene the way it feels right. Well, wait, maybe there have been a few times I've cut out some stuff that doesn't work. I guess not a whole lot or I wouldn't be so iffy about it. LOL

 
At 10:20 AM , Blogger Jennifer Ashley said...

My problem was the scene *didn't* feel right--and I was trying to force it. When I stopped forcing, gee, everything got so much easier. Also, I'm reining in the hero too much. He's an alpha bad boy with uber-self-confidence, and I need to let him go for it. I hope my fictional world is ready!

 
At 11:48 AM , Blogger Jordan Summers said...

I recently had that very thing happen. I wasn't trying to force a love scene, but I was trying to force a connection before it developed naturally. I also had written the scene in the wrong POV. I knew something was wrong and I couldn't move on until I figured out what it was. Took me forever to discover the problem. Glad you got your scene wrangled. :-)

 

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